The first and most important goal for the schematic is to have a user readable reference of what a circuit does and how it works.
The schematic is all about function, and not about form.
For you as the designer it does not matter much (at the moment) because you've probably put a bunch of hours into designing it and know every detail intimately.
But what if someone else reads it, or if you want to make a modification 5 or 10 years later?
For the function it does not matter at all whether a (power?) resistor is soldered directly to the PCB or via some connector. But if you do not even show there is a resistor in your circuit the schematic is broken. I have no idea how many and how the resistors are intended to be connected to your connector. I could guess there would be 4 resistors, horizontally connected, but it's a guess, and I don't like to guess. Your schematic also does not show the value or power rating of the resistors. It's not even in your BOM so you probably forget to order it.
The schematic of the "lofi noise box" is the expected and normal way to draw a schematic. For the function it does not matter (except for some parasitic inductance / capacitance) whether the potentiometer is somewhere else. If you want to be explicit, then you could draw a dashed line around it and add a comment that the potentiometer is off-board, but I regard that as mostly clutter and implementation details that obfuscate the function.
It really should be big things first. And the big thing is that there are resistors in your circuit, and how they are connected to the rest of the schematic.
Similar for IC's. When I see a circuit in which all the pins are drawn in the order they are on the IC, then my first question is "does this make sense here?" and almost always the answer is no. (Sometimes it makes sense, for example for a test socket in an universal programmer). Another example is showing operational amplifiers as a square box instead of triangles, or even worse, a quad op-amp which has a single dip-14 schematic symbol. Yuch! When I see those things, I rarely look further at the rest of the circuit but just post a remark to redraw the schematic. I am just not willing to waste time into deciphering such stuff.